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  1. Barry the Baptist

    Barry the Baptist Hello son, would you like a lolly?
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    It is about top Dodger Prospect (now starting 3rd baseman) Andy LaRoche. It's in PDF format but it's on pages 12-14. Any thoughts or feedback would be great.I have thick skin so if it sucks let me know. Thanks

    http://lvsportsmagazine.com/pdf/LVSM_MAY.pdf
     
    #1 Barry the Baptist, May 13, 2007
  2. statjeff22

    statjeff22 2008 Green Guy "Most Knowledgeable" Award Winner

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    Congratulations! A nice read. We'll gloss over you referring to Adam LaRoche (.164 BA, .553 OPS) as "the hard-hitting first baseman with the Pittsburgh Pirates". If I were you I would watch repeating phrases - starting two consecutive sentences with "After all" is a no no.

    Most importantly, who is this Chris Chapman guy, and why has he stolen your byline, Rich? :wink:
     
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  3. MParty7441

    MParty7441 Well-Known Member

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    I'm published every 3 or 4 days on Gotham Baseball, check me out!!
     
    #3 MParty7441, May 13, 2007
  4. Learn To Swim

    Learn To Swim 2008 Nightowltom "Best Non-Jets Poster" Award Winn

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    Get your own thread.
     
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  5. MParty7441

    MParty7441 Well-Known Member

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    i was thinking that was going to happen, lol
     
    #5 MParty7441, May 13, 2007
  6. Barry the Baptist

    Barry the Baptist Hello son, would you like a lolly?
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    I purposely put the "after all" in consecutive sentences as if to say why you shouldn't doubt this kid.

    And mparty I actually met Ed Rivera who writes for Gotham Baseball in vegas last year, nice guy and a huge Mets fan
     
    #6 Barry the Baptist, May 13, 2007
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