Songwriting Feedback For My song

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  1. blake allyn

    blake allyn New Member

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    Hey all, I wrote this song and wanted some constructive criticism from some fellow jets fans. Be harsh! Also if you do listen please hit the subscribe button on youtube as it helps with search engines. Thanks and please no Fournette.




     
    #1 blake allyn, Apr 7, 2017
  2. FJF

    FJF 2018 MVP Joe Namath Award Winner

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    Just here for the lols
     
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  3. blake allyn

    blake allyn New Member

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    WHat the heck is that?
     
    #3 blake allyn, Apr 7, 2017
  4. FJF

    FJF 2018 MVP Joe Namath Award Winner

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    things can get brutal around here and i am only interested in this thread for that potential.
    Btw, i made it 1 minute into the song. if i want to listen to someone trying to sound like bob bylan i go listen to bob dylan
     
    #4 FJF, Apr 7, 2017
  5. BrowningNagle

    BrowningNagle Well-Known Member

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    I'd do her
     
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    BrowningNagle Well-Known Member

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    I got far enough to hear: "I said nicole you are lookin' fiiiiine. why dont you come be in miiiiiine" in bob dylan accent and I was out
     
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  7. blake allyn

    blake allyn New Member

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    Glad you gave it a fair shake lol!!!

    Thanks for giving it a try though, to each his own.
     
    #7 blake allyn, Apr 7, 2017
  8. John Lombardo

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    An 8 minute song?
     
    #8 John Lombardo, Apr 7, 2017
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    abyzmul R.J. MacReady, 21018 Funniest Member Award Winner

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    Would Steve's last name happen to be Stone?
     
    #9 abyzmul, Apr 7, 2017
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    FJF 2018 MVP Joe Namath Award Winner

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    You listened for 8 minutes?
     
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  11. John Lombardo

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    No, the video says it has a length of 8 minutes and 29 seconds. Back in my hay day I would get baked and listen to 15 minute Mars Volta songs, but those days are long gone.
     
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    That makes more sense
     
    #12 FJF, Apr 7, 2017
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    HIT THAT LIKE!!!!!
     
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    NYJalltheway Well-Known Member

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    Oh what a good band. I haven't listened to them in ages. Thanks for reminding me.

    Sent from my XT1650 using Tapatalk
     
    #14 NYJalltheway, Apr 7, 2017
  15. John Lombardo

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    De Loused in the Comatorium is one of my favorite albums of all time. The others were a little too out there for me.

    Huge At the Drive In fan too.
     
    #15 John Lombardo, Apr 7, 2017
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  17. The Waterboy

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    As soon as I saw the song title that was the first thing I thought of.

     
    #17 The Waterboy, Apr 7, 2017
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    this is even worse than a song about Jack & Diane..
     
    #18 joe, Apr 7, 2017
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    The Waterboy Well-Known Member

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    Oh, and Steve Stone, who changed his name on YouTube to Dylan Tweed, just happens to be a subscriber to Blake Allyn's YouTube channel
     
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    Didn't this douche also post a Jets song a year or so ago that was also impossible to listen to for twenty seconds?
     
    #20 Ralebird, Apr 8, 2017
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